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A Poem

Post by china on Wed Apr 25, 2007 5:20 pm

hey, I was just wondering if any of you guys could critique a poem i wrote for English class?

Blood

Blood is a rose
blossoming from an open wound

Blood is a stain
of pain and war

Blood is the gift
of a mother to her child

Blood is ink
writting the story of lives

i know it's pretty bad,so if you could please give me some sugestions???
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Post by Twilightvampire17 on Wed Apr 25, 2007 6:26 pm

china wrote:hey, I was just wondering if any of you guys could critique a poem i wrote for English class?

Blood

Blood is a rose
blossoming from an open wound

Blood is a stain
of pain and war

Blood is the gift
of a mother to her child

Blood is ink
writting the story of lives

i know it's pretty bad,so if you could please give me some sugestions???

No i really love it....I love to write how about we start a writing thread and I'll move it over there?

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